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Post by 4amWriter on Nov 1, 2012 15:06:25 GMT
Hope everyone is having a great first day on NaNo! I thought it would be fun to share our opening sentences that we wrote today...
Here's mine from The Captain's Spell:
Rebecca raced through the dark halls, desperately trying to outrun the band of men who wanted her dead.
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Post by yrdeni on Nov 2, 2012 8:03:34 GMT
Haha, I love this idea! Although I thought we weren't supposed to read anything back Mine's: “What’s the password again?” “It’s the name of the bar, plus your anniversary date, Dad.” “Oh yeah… “Is that all lower case?” “Dad, how many times…? It’s title case - the first letter of each word is upper-case and the rest is lower-case. The date’s, obviously, a number.” “Right.” My novel is still untitled. I'm also already on chapter 2 (out of 14 or 15...), but I think (I hope) the first chapter is smaller than the rest... Otherwise I'm only looking at about 30,000 words...!
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Post by 4amWriter on Nov 2, 2012 8:42:39 GMT
True--we're not supposed to. You'll find that I can be a rebel. Sometimes, I even leave the cap off the toothpaste. Wow, you're motoring right along Lordscree. I like that dialogue exchange. I didn't get a lot done yesterday. Hopefully, I can catch up this weekend.
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Post by yrdeni on Nov 2, 2012 10:40:31 GMT
True--we're not supposed to. You'll find that I can be a rebel. Sometimes, I even leave the cap off the toothpaste. Wow, you're motoring right along Lordscree. I like that dialogue exchange. I didn't get a lot done yesterday. Hopefully, I can catch up this weekend. Haha, you rebel, you! Thanks - yeah, I had to get a lot written last night and this morning because I have a wedding to go to this afternoon and I'm away all Saturday! Lots of catching up, come Sunday. I hope you get some time on the weekend.
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Post by limebirdwriters on Nov 2, 2012 10:44:42 GMT
haha, Kate you rebel! This is mine from 'The Key of Secrets' "The morning of her 11th birthday, Jack Archer woke to the feeling of a wet tongue coating her cheek in slobber. " I like your dialogue Scree!
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Post by neekswrite on Nov 2, 2012 12:07:24 GMT
Well, I have no idea where this came from, it was supposed to be a beautiful and bittersweet story of the trip this woman takes to find her courage ... and this is what came out:
MC laid her granny panties on the bed and decided to roll them up tightly and squeeze them into a ziploc baggie.
That isn't wrong, is it? lol
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Post by limebirdvanessa on Nov 2, 2012 12:23:17 GMT
Haha! Neeks, I love that!
My first sentence was:
"Well of course it's not just about colours," said Maddie, pulling out a few more stems, and brushing her blonde locks behind her ears. "Pass me those secateurs will you?"
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Post by limebirdwriters on Nov 2, 2012 12:26:20 GMT
Well, I have no idea where this came from, it was supposed to be a beautiful and bittersweet story of the trip this woman takes to find her courage ... and this is what came out: MC laid her granny panties on the bed and decided to roll them up tightly and squeeze them into a ziploc baggie. That isn't wrong, is it? lol Haha Neeks! This honestly makes me want to read it!
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Post by limebirdwriters on Nov 2, 2012 12:27:17 GMT
Haha! Neeks, I love that! My first sentence was: "Well of course it's not just about colours," said Maddie, pulling out a few more stems, and brushing her blonde locks behind her ears. "Pass me those secateurs will you?" Ohh, this is such a fun thread! Except I know want to know the rest! Darn these pesky first lines.
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Post by neekswrite on Nov 2, 2012 15:56:25 GMT
Thanks y'all, I hope the rest of the sentences are equally compelling!!
Love these first lines, but what is a secateur?
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Post by ottabelle on Nov 2, 2012 16:18:23 GMT
These are pretty good openings Neeks yours so so funny, especially with what you said before. It shows part of her character. Here's mine! Damian stared at the first level biology class he taught. I really like the bit that comes after it. It shows what a jerk he is.
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Post by limebirdwriters on Nov 2, 2012 17:14:10 GMT
Thanks y'all, I hope the rest of the sentences are equally compelling!! Love these first lines, but what is a secateur? A secateur is like garden shears?
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Post by 4amWriter on Nov 2, 2012 21:23:26 GMT
haha, Kate you rebel! This is mine from 'The Key of Secrets' "The morning of her 11th birthday, Jack Archer woke to the feeling of a wet tongue coating her cheek in slobber. " I like your dialogue Scree! Funny sentence, Beth. So, Jack is a female?
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Post by 4amWriter on Nov 2, 2012 21:24:31 GMT
Well, I have no idea where this came from, it was supposed to be a beautiful and bittersweet story of the trip this woman takes to find her courage ... and this is what came out: MC laid her granny panties on the bed and decided to roll them up tightly and squeeze them into a ziploc baggie. That isn't wrong, is it? lol Awesome! I love this little bit of insight into your MC right off the bat.
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Post by 4amWriter on Nov 2, 2012 21:26:48 GMT
Thanks y'all, I hope the rest of the sentences are equally compelling!! Love these first lines, but what is a secateur? A secateur is like garden shears? Oh, really? I didn't know what secateurs were either. Sounds very sophisticated.
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