martinc
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Post by martinc on Jan 23, 2012 22:33:06 GMT
Hi Everyone - This is a story called 'Method Acting.' Like many of you I'm in the process of honing and networking. Any feedback gratefully appreciated... martincororan.wordpress.com/downloads/Thanks, Martin
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Post by limebirdwriters on Jan 25, 2012 10:29:56 GMT
Hi Martin, Welcome to the Limebird Forum! I have saved it to my desktop and will read at lunch!
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Post by 4amWriter on Jan 25, 2012 10:40:54 GMT
Hello Martin,
I just read the first page to get a quick idea of what you have. You are a very good writer, literary fiction comes to mind, and I immediately liked how you set up the scene. I will come back to it in a few...!
Limebirdkate
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martinc
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Post by martinc on Jan 25, 2012 21:28:30 GMT
Thank you for the welcome and initial comments - I'm heading off for a week or so, but will have a proper look around when I get back...
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Post by 4amWriter on Jan 26, 2012 2:38:51 GMT
Hi Martin,
I just finished reading it. I really liked it. It was intense, dark, intriguing, and compelling. I thought you did a great job tying in the method acting rituals so that they ultimately become habit and a part of your protag. After a while I started believing he was Eziekiel!
I also liked the research you did (If you did research) regarding Broadway and plays, because everything was quite authentic and I felt like I was right there in NYC. Great job with setting and voice.
I wanted to know a little bit about his history and why he "lost" his identity, especially when he has a history of acting. Had that ever happened to him before? Why? I guess I just felt like the motivation/believability wasn't quite stacked up enough for me.Does he have a mental history that affects him in such a way, or did he snap, or was he triggered somehow? I guess just something to help me understand how this could happen once but not have happened before.
Very good story. I enjoyed reading it. LimebirdKate
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Post by martinc on Feb 2, 2012 19:45:24 GMT
Hey 4am Writer,
Thanks for taking the trouble to read this, and for the feedback. I went to New York a fair few times during my twenties, so it wasn't so much research as drunken recollection. I'm going to have a think about what you said re: the 'lost' identity / back story stuff - I deliberately left him as a blank / empty canvas, but will look at incorporating more indicators as to why he submersed himself in another person's life.
Thanks again. Martin
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Post by 4amWriter on Feb 7, 2012 3:21:12 GMT
Hey 4am Writer, Thanks for taking the trouble to read this, and for the feedback. I went to New York a fair few times during my twenties, so it wasn't so much research as drunken recollection. I'm going to have a think about what you said re: the 'lost' identity / back story stuff - I deliberately left him as a blank / empty canvas, but will look at incorporating more indicators as to why he submersed himself in another person's life. Thanks again. Martin Hi Martin, I think, then, if you purposely left him as a blank canvas, you should leave it that way. That's how you envisioned the character and his story, so that is probably how it needs to be written. I'm a big "why?" person, and I love knowing how people get themselves into such messes. That's just my personality, so it doesn't mean you should mess around with your vision. Regardless of getting those questions answered, I enjoyed the story and your writing. Limebirdkate
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