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Post by dennismlane on Jan 12, 2012 7:36:50 GMT
Hi all, Here is Chapter 2 of my Young Adult Novel; where Talatu visits her father in aeroponics and he tells her a story of leaving home; and where she and her best friends make plans to finagle the Cadet exercise. I hope that you enjoy it, and would welcome any feedback/comments at all. Dennis Attachments:
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Post by ottabelle on Feb 1, 2012 5:22:11 GMT
I think I saw foreshadowing in here, I like that.  Another good chapter that I was too busy reading to pay attention x.x I love the relationship between Talatu and Castlemore. I think it's really sweet. It reminds me of a relationship in "The Android's Dream" between a friends - one was human, the other his dead friend in the consciousness of a computer. (It's a good read, lots of things happen in the book.) |
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Post by dennismlane on Feb 1, 2012 20:35:34 GMT
I think I saw foreshadowing in here, I like that. Another good chapter that I was too busy reading to pay attention x.x I love the relationship between Talatu and Castlemore. I think it's really sweet. It reminds me of a relationship in "The Android's Dream" between a friends - one was human, the other his dead friend in the consciousness of a computer. (It's a good read, lots of things happen in the book.) Thank you <B>very</b> much ottabelle! "Too busy reading to pay attention" is about the best compliment I could receive! I'm glad that you are enjoying where it's going. |
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Post by ottabelle on Feb 2, 2012 2:35:00 GMT
Hehe, I'm glad my compliment made sense. It almost didn't and seemed off when I read it today. I'm glad you liked it though  Hurry up and get published so I can find out what happens  |
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Post by dennismlane on Feb 2, 2012 5:38:37 GMT
Hehe, I'm glad my compliment made sense. It almost didn't and seemed off when I read it today. I'm glad you liked it though Hurry up and get published so I can find out what happens Well, I'm close to finishing the draft that I think is about ready to go to the publisher that I have targeted. Would you be interested in taking a look at the full draft? I always welcome the chance to have someone look at a story as a whole. |
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Post by ottabelle on Feb 4, 2012 3:51:04 GMT
Sure o: I'd love to. I'll try to get it read as fast as I can.
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Post by dennismlane on Feb 5, 2012 14:21:37 GMT
Thanks! As soon as I finish this draft I'll send it through to you |
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Post by ottabelle on Feb 6, 2012 17:30:06 GMT
Yay!
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