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Post by ottabelle on Dec 7, 2011 1:23:31 GMT
I know most of us don't want to share full parts, that's fine! I'm really apprehensive about it too. I think everyone has a bunch of favorites lines or scenes they have written, though. I think it would be fun to share them. I have far too many, I think. I just love my book ._. So here's a few bits from random places. Usually I like whole scenes more, but here goes:
Time travel arouse spontaneously across all timelines. Scholars fought with each other about how this could have happened. After the fifteenth scholar mysteriously lost his research papers, they came together and agreed to disagree and each just published his or her own book.
The headquarters of the Time Police resembled something M. C. Escher would vomit onto building plans.
“No need to be so vulgar towards the machine that has helped you for so long.” Ryder rolled his eyes.
Don’t kill Sayla because of who she is, revive her because of who she isn’t yet.
She sighed. “It won’t zap my eye out will it? I’m rather partial to my eyes. I’m already fairly broken.”
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Post by 4amWriter on Dec 7, 2011 2:18:55 GMT
That's some great stuff! Did all of those lines come out of one novel, or several? And that's something you've written, correct?
I do have favorite lines, but I can't think of any right now. Lemme think on it... ;D
limebirdkate
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Post by ottabelle on Dec 7, 2011 4:25:05 GMT
All from the same one, the NaNo novel, Abstaining from Permanence. They came from difference places haha. I just opened up my document and went to a few places I remembered. I can't wait to see yours
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Post by limebirdwriters on Dec 7, 2011 9:38:04 GMT
Ohh this is such a good topic! Wow, I'm going to have to have a think about favourite lines!
I like the sound of your book, can you tell us some more?
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Post by ottabelle on Dec 8, 2011 3:06:15 GMT
Sure o: I'll do my best. One of the things I know I can be bad at is explaining things. Here is one chance to work on it! Maybe I should start a thread eventually on working on summaries or synopses... Sammy Kain realizes that the world is changing around her and no one else seems to see it. The changes are small and make no sense. She decides that she is having a psychotic episode and descends into a self-destructive cycle. Meanwhile, 200 years in the future, a small squad that came to be known as the Regents is assigned to her time to deal with the problem of the changes. They Regents are not ordinary time agents. Due to an accident, they can step out of linear time and view the past and present interacting, and glimpse the future. However, they could not see these changes. They're a team that's on the edge of going insane themselves and their motto is "Laughter keeps the insanity away." A group called Kala-Siva suddenly starts appearing in whispers in the time stream, the day they can see the changes. Kala-Siva is behind the changes, but why? The obvious answer becomes apparent, but things are never as clear as they seem; especially when you're playing with time. The Regents and Sammy meet on accident and shouldn't meet again, but someone interferes. Turtles eat at the time stream and attack them on different occasions. Sammy meets a man in different forms who tries to protect her. He is connected to Kala-Siva, but how deeply? This group of people on the fringe of sanity is supposed to save history? Why yes, yes they are. You can't throw sane people into a situation like this, they would crumble. I... I think that is the best I have ever written. ._. (Which may still be awful ) I was trying to be vague and only hit the high points, but if you want a blow-by-blow I can do that too.
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Post by limebirdwriters on Dec 8, 2011 9:11:09 GMT
Ohh wow, that sounds great! I am a serious sucker for anything with a sci-fi element to it. (Especially things that aren't really possible in our world!)
Have you written a first draft of your novel?
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Post by ottabelle on Dec 8, 2011 10:07:46 GMT
It's not complete. It's being worked on now, still. Just have hit a rough patch in the creativity department since NaNo ended. The scenes are good, I think, just not coming out as profusely as they did in November.
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Post by loupy on Dec 11, 2011 10:35:19 GMT
Wow this all sounds really great! I'd definitely read that if ever given the chance!
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Post by limebirdwriters on Dec 11, 2011 14:19:49 GMT
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Post by loupy on Dec 11, 2011 23:30:47 GMT
oooooo totally going to read it!
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Post by ottabelle on Dec 12, 2011 21:04:48 GMT
I'm so excited.
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Post by limebirdsophie on Dec 17, 2011 11:42:33 GMT
Definately going to give this a read when i get a chance, its right up my alley .
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Post by ottabelle on Dec 19, 2011 6:27:14 GMT
I'm happy. Kinda scared, but happy. xD
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Post by ottabelle on Feb 2, 2012 2:49:04 GMT
Revving an old thread More people should post in here ._. Here's a recent line from AfP! She growled, “Body! Take me back to the square in my own time! Right now!” Suddenly, she saw the time vortex around her. She felt distracted for a moment by the lights, and smiled. She forgot about her anger for a moment; forgot about her fear. She tumbled onto the dirt of the once vibrant square. She stood covered in debris. The Regents came back into time a few seconds after she did. Sammy stared at the area that only a moment ago was empty. “Where the hell did you guys go?” she growled, confused again. That's more than a line But there were multiple in there I liked.
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Post by dennismlane on Feb 2, 2012 9:25:20 GMT
Here's a whole range of lines (well, not lines, but short clips, I find that a single line isn't enough) From "Closed Circuit" My legs went numb and I fell to the floor. As things went black I heard the silky voice of AMANDA coming from above the screen… “Dissent is illegal. Illegal acts must be prevented. Thank you for trusting your security to the AMANDA system.” ---------------------------------- From "Crime Scene" The object of all the attention is a headless corpse. No, scratch that, it’s a corpse in two pieces. The body is sprawled on its front over a small coffee table, a thick goo of half congealed blood hanging like a tiny red stalactite from the ragged terminus of the neck. The head is a few feet away, staring accusingly at me across a scarlet pool that has turned the carpet into a squelching mess. ---------------------------------- From the opening of "Enemies Reunited" Adolf Hitler : Has become a member of the Group "Let's get Wagner to No1 this Christmas!!!" Joseph Stalin : Does not like this. Pol Pot : Has deleted his calendar and reset his system date to zero. Heng Samrin : LOL ---------------------------------- From "The Case of the Vanishing Prince" "Item one,” Bell raised a finger, “his ribbons; according to the story laid out by their colourful ranks, he served with distinction in both Jhajjar and Shorapur during the Sepoy Mutiny. As the two states are at least one thousand miles removed, I find that hard to believe. Possible, but highly unlikely.” “Item two,” a second finger joined the first, “his moustache. Note the way that each branch bifurcates and is waxed? The style was very common with dirigible pilots during the first years of their operation as munitions platforms, but it is very unlikely that an infantryman would sport such a style." "Item number three,” Bell counted off a third finger, “observe his artificial hand. It is of a style used by the Hospitaller Order of Saint Lazarus of Jerusalem. That appendage was never constructed and fitted by a surgeon of the Empire." Bell took a sip of his drink and sat back with satisfaction. "And so, I have no doubt at all that the ‘gentleman’ is a career confidence artist; one who came a cropper in the lands of the Turk, leading to the amputation of a hand for his crimes." ---------------------------------- From "Surrogate" And now, when I think about the betrayal behind each one of those days, I feel dirty. We may not have had a physical relationship, but it was more intimate than that; I was a surrogate husband, doing everything for Sarah. She trusted me and I lied to her. My very existence was a lie. ---------------------------------- From "The Hunger" For days the Afreet sat beneath the overhang, its hunger no longer an inescapable force. It dreamed, it sang songs that were old before the first plough was drawn across the fertile soil of Babylonia. But, eventually, the hunger began to gnaw. It resisted for a while, revelling in the freedom to think of something other than meat. Until, on the dawn of the ninth day, the Afreet could ignore its hunger no longer. ----------------------- Hope you enjoy them!
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